My poem about Lothlorien

[Eldawen]

I wrote this poem a while back and it's not much but I sent it in to a poetry contest and it made the semifinals, I'm not sure if it got any farther but I think that you all might enjoy because it is about Lothlorien.


Lothlorien

Upon the boughs of the mellorn trees
in winter months shine the golden leaves.
In years long passed this land was called
The Land of the Valley of Singing Gold,
Laurelindorinen in the high elven tongue.
But since has dwindled
to the Dreamflower, Lothlorien.
Swift have the years flown by
and upon quick wings comes time
to sweep this place away.
And only the stars of Varda Elentari
are left to watch this land fade.
Yet the memory of fair Lothlorien lives
within the hearts of those who once dwelt there.
And forever preserved will be that memory
upon a distant shore, in an undying land
called Valinor.
Namarie Lothlorien,
thout shall never be forgotten.
Namarie.

You guys are welcome to give me any suggestions on how to make this better. Until next time, namarie.

[Elfhelm]

i thought that wus pretty good Eldawen ;D.

[MISSTRESSOFHALDIR]

Eldawen I very much loved your lothlorien poem i hope that you'll put some more off your poems up


mela (love) from misstressofhaldir

[Eldawen]

Thank you for your compliments everyone. This next poem doesn't have any direct mention of anything LotR or anything like, but it imply's the feelings of Middle-Earth after the elves depart, as told by an elf who has remained behind. Well, here it is.

Home Again

I came back home after many long years.
How it has changed I cannot begin to say.
Where many beautiful voices like silver could once be heard,
now all is still, even the songs of the birds.
My people left these lands long ago,
and with them went the songs and magic.
They left this land for a distant shore,
for to them the land was turned old and grey
and too full of sorrow for them to stay.
How I longed to go with them,
but I am still needed in these forsaken lands,
and here I shall remain until my task is done.
But until then I will come back to this very place
to feel the presence of my people,
who left their mark upon the land.
Their memory remains in this very place I now stand,
and in my heart my people live on
until the day comes that I can join them on that far away shore.

[Vedin]

Nice poem Eldawen. I realy like it.

[Andrulin]

Very Nice poem, i loved reading it. You must took time and effort to produce a beautiful piece

[Eldawen]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoy my poems. It doesn't take that much time to write a poem the first time, but it's the revisions and rewritting that takes the longest and after that there is still room for improvment. The hardest part though is finding inspiration. I haven't got anymore poems at the moment but once I have another one I'll post for you all. By the way, feel free to post your own poems here.

Namarie,
Eldawen Starsong

[Vedin]

Your welcom. I'm looking forword to reading the other poems.

[Unurithiel]

Eldawen,
Your poems are beautiful, just beautiful. Not everyone has the gift of writing poetry, especially long poems.

I could see the imagery descibed by your poems, in my mind.

Please continue to work on another poem.

I hope your are writing and recording your poems in a special book for yourself?

[Eldawen]

Thank you all very much for your compliments and support. I will try and get another poem up as soon as I can. Thanks again.

Namarie,
Eldawen Starsong

[Vedin]

If it realy takes you as long as you say it does you must write alot of poems to be that good.

[Eldawen]

Here is another poem reflecting the feelings of an elf longing for Valinor. Hope you guys enjoy it, and critisism is welcome.

The Sea

The sea calls to me,
It calls me back to the shores I left behind
So long ago.
The thundering waves are but an echo
Of my pounding heart when I think of home.
And the cry of the gull is like
To the cry that reverberates through my soul each and every night.

My tears are as salty as the warm sea air
That comforts and caresses me.
Standing here beside so wide a sea
As the evening light turns grey
Makes home seem far away.

[Caprix]

nice, very nice and aspecially to know that you are only 16, I didn't know your age and was thinking you were a bit older (that is ment to be positive

[Eldawen]

I know I seem older than I really am when I type and all that, though I am in real life more mature than most people my age. That last poem was written for an English assignment but I think it turned out pretty good. I have quite a few other poems, but they are more of the depressed poems I write when I'm in a bad mood and have nothing to do with LotR, or else I would post them.

[raszgal]

I like hearing certain types of poems. I like the ones people write when there mad/ depressed. Also ones of true joy and happiness. Many many more. Eldawen to me you seem gifted. I like your poems alot.